Slow Thuds

I recently got a creative writing prompt to write a short story. Y’all can also submit your prompts on the “Your Idea Box” page here.
The prompt : “The dull sound has echoed in her ears as long as she could remember. No one else seems to hear it. The thing is, over the years, the thuds have been getting closer and closer. Today, they are only a few minutes apart.

The dull sound has echoed in her ears as long as she could remember. No one else seems to hear it. It all started on a sunny morning, Stacy Fischer, a chirpy eleven-year-old girl, got too distracted during the science class. The professor, a 48-year-old army veteran, couldn’t handle his fragile male ego getting tarnished. Stacy received five blows on each hand, each thud echoing in her mind and imprinting its horrific trail on her hand. Nightmares stretched beyond the night. Stress hid under the garb of excuses. Her confidence, lurking in the shadows, ceased to exist. The thing is, over the years, the thuds have been getting closer and closer. Today, they are only a few minutes apart.

 Children, please welcome your new English teacher, Miss Stacy. As she greeted the children, smiling, the thuds vanished. Resolve had taken over, making sure that the ordeal won’t be faced by anyone else.

Author’s note : My college has started online and life is again regaining its old and hectic pace. I try to be regular and active on the blog, be it reading your beautiful pieces or visiting blogs that reach out to me. Please bare with me if you feel that I have not been that active. I’ll compensate for it, sooner or later. How is your life going, readers ? ✨
Do tell me your views on the prompt and the short story in the comment section below. Hope you like it !

63 Comments Add yours

  1. A touching tale Piyush. Some teachers just mar the child’s confidence in the name of discipline and learning.

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    1. I absolutely agree with you. Very unfortunate but a harsh reality

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  2. Yleniaely says:

    Absolutely wonderful story!!! 😍 I love it, very great!!! πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ˜ƒπŸ‘πŸ’–

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    1. Thank you ! πŸ’–βœ¨

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    1. Rishika Jain says:

      And it’s totally fine…It is hard to manage school/college and blogging. I am currently buried in homework🀣

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      1. Yes, I feel you πŸ˜‚

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      2. Rishika Jain says:

        *high five* 🀣🀣

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    2. Thanks a lot ! πŸ’–

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  3. Beating and scolding is not a solution. I am glad that Stacy vowed not to follow her teacher’s example.
    Very well written! And as for your hectic schedule, I understand what you are going through πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜
    It’s the same for every student. 😁

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    1. Thanks a lot ! πŸ’–

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  4. Aww that’s such a sweet ending. I’m glad that she decided to become a better teacher!

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    1. Thank you ! πŸ’–

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  5. vaniheart says:

    Wonderful story πŸ‘πŸ‘

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  6. Aliosa says:

    Thank your for visit and like ! πŸ™‚
    AlioΘ™a ! πŸ™‚

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  7. pranavsable says:

    It is very true, managing blogging and school is quite difficult

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  8. pranavsable says:

    bro plz follow me too, and encourage me plz

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    1. Sure, heading at your blog

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    1. Thanks a lot ! πŸ’–
      You know, you might not know this, but you were the one who commented the very first time on my blog. It was on the Da Vinci Code post. I always remember that first comment, and reflect on where I am now. I love your work and have the utmost respect for you πŸ˜ŠπŸ’–βœ¨

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  9. Nawazish says:

    A great tale piyush!! Loved it!!πŸ’•πŸ’•

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    1. Thanks a lot Nawazish ! πŸ’–

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  10. Taruna says:

    A clear acknowledgement of the marks that can be left by those in authority… well said, well written!

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    1. Thanks a lot ! πŸ’–

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  11. Hi Piyush,

    Life is lagging behind for some and its running out for others… especially these covid days…

    Everything’s well and good as of now.. Hope you are doing well too.

    Repeating the history of pain doesn’t reduce it…it only increases the depth of wound πŸ’”
    Miss Stacy is the real need of now!

    Keep writing whenever your heart prompts. It’s not about being consistent.. it’s about the content.

    Have a great time

    With Love,
    Aleesha Thomas

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    1. Thanks a lot for your kind words. Life is indeed lagging behind and I’m glad that everything is well with you. I agree with your views about Miss Stacy and consistency.
      All the best and keep writing ! πŸ’–βœ¨

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      1. Thanks and be happy always ✨

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  12. Thank the Lord for Miss Stacy! I’m glad she rose above it.

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  13. Nathi says:

    A highly relatable tale and well written, Piyush! In the name of discipline, some teachers harsh methods discourages and most often hinders a child’s learning and growth.

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    1. I totally agree with you Nathi !

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  14. Beautiful! I get so many ideas daily, I can’t imagine NOT writing! β€οΈπŸ¦‹πŸŒ€

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    1. I know right ! πŸ’–

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  15. Dolly Vas says:

    Hii, I have nominated for you GAMBA AWARD, great achiver Maha-Siddhi blogger award. Visit my recent post.

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    1. Thank you for your nomination πŸ’–

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      1. Dolly Vas says:

        Thanks a lot piyush.βœŒπŸ€—

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  16. Aakanksha says:

    Absolutely wonderful story!!!!πŸ’™

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    1. Thank you ! πŸ’–βœ¨

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  17. As a teacher, I am against any physical punishment. It does not do any good, instead, it shatters a child’s confidence…

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    1. I absolutely agree with you ma’am !

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  18. inspirechief says:

    A wonderful story. In such few words you covered how we are born with all the gifts to be great. As we grow, others steal our gifts, such as self-confidence. She recognized this and stopped the cycle. Thank you for sharing and following my blog. Take care.

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    1. Well said ! Thanks a lot and keep writing πŸ’–βœ¨

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  19. Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
    SOUNDETH GOOD! πŸ˜€

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    1. Thank you for the reblog !

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      1. You are entirely welcome….!

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  20. apsmalhotra says:

    The prompt has been captured quite effectively…..although the story could have been more exhaustive in describing the turmoil of the protagonist…

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    1. Yeah, I agree that it could have been more exhaustive, but the whole point of a short story is to capture the essence in as few words as possible !

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  21. Kally says:

    Powerful and inspiring.

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    1. Thanks a lot ! πŸ’–βœ¨

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  22. Life is what it is during this difficult time. We understand. All the best.

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    1. Thank you and same to you !

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  23. usfman says:

    The best part of your stories to me would be how you concisely condense meaning in a few paragraphs.I would recommend avoiding the old and hectic pace to spark your creativity going.

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    1. Thank you so much friend ! πŸ’–βœ¨

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  24. I like the way you gave your story an end with a positive resolve.
    People often tend to transfer their ill experiences to others, repeating history over and over again.
    Let’s be among those that will bury the ills and hand down beauty.

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    1. Thank you so much. Amen ! πŸ’–βœ¨

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  25. Msdedeng says:

    This is very cool.

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    1. Thank you so much ! πŸ’–πŸ™Œ

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      1. Msdedeng says:

        You are welcome friend.

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  26. In the nineties, I actually saw a teacher punishing a student out in the parking lot, hitting their palm with a ruler. The vice principal was the only one who was allowed to inflict corporal punishment, and I think it was illegal, but it was my first year of teaching and I just felt shocked.

    I enjoyed reading your story, Piyush. I liked the ending with a twist. I hope in my career I was like Miss Stacey in how I related to students. All the best, Cheryl ❀

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind words Cheryl. I didn’t know that you were a teacher. You are an amazing blogger and I’m sure you would have been closer to Miss Stacy. Thanks once again ! πŸ’–βœ¨

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